同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第一期

　　同等學(xué)力英語考試主觀題一直都是在職考生的攔路虎，如何把英語作文寫好，成為擺在考生們面前的最大障礙。為此同等學(xué)歷考試輔導(dǎo)老師，為準備參加考試的考生批改作文。現(xiàn)將其中部分批改內(nèi)容提供給廣大同等學(xué)力考生參考。

　　同等學(xué)力英語作文原文：

　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China.

　　Nobody can have failed to notice the fact that medical treatment have been a grave problem with which we can confronted. Taking a look around, we can find example too numberous to list: when we go to hospital, the time of waiting to face a doctor is longer than before; the cost of the medicine is more expensive than before.

　　A number of factors account for the problem, but the follwing are the most critical ones .In the first place, the number of people notice their healthy than before ,so they go to hospital more than before. The second place, the medical reform is not successful in hospital, doctors are  not enough .The last place, some new medicines for fever and cough are more expensive than before ,At the same time, the cheaper medicines are not be production .

　　How to solve the problem in the medical treatment? Firsr of all, people should realize that they can keep their own healty by some good habits, Second, the government should increace the money in the hospital, develop the quantity and quality of the doctors. Thirdly, the reform of medicine price should carry out in the hospital.

　　老師評語：

　　得分6-8分

　　該文基本符合寫作要求，較完整的表述了醫(yī)療現(xiàn)狀，問題原因以及醫(yī)療改革的建議。

　　但是，語言錯誤較多，內(nèi)容不是很充實。建議在今后的英語學(xué)習(xí)中，從英語基本功抓起，盡量避免出現(xiàn)過多的語法錯誤。