同等學力英語作文批改：第三期

　　同等學力英語作文原文：

　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China
     
　　With the rapid development of modern society, an increasing number of people are concerned about the issue of reform of medical care in China. At present, most people argue that medical care is too high and it is difficult for persons to go to the doctor.
    
　　In my opinion, some driving reasons that lead to the above mentioned problem can be illustrated as follows. To begin with, the best doctor in China work in a few big city .what's more, patients like going to the big city to go to the best doctor .At last, the level of people's life in Chain is lower in modern society and the persons cannot affort to give medical care.
    
　　Based on what has been discussed above, it follows that some solutions should be found to solve the problem of reform of medical care .On the one hand, the level of people' life is promoted as fast as possible by the government .On the other hand, the government is bound to develop more doctors .Only in these ways can we improve development of reform of medical care in China.

　　老師評語：得分5-6分

　　你沒有理解清楚寫作的要求。該寫作任務是，發現現在的醫療問題，找出原因，給出醫療改革的建議，但是你卻在論述，醫療改革的問題及如何改進。

　　同時，根據你前后文語言表達的情況，英語基本功比較薄弱，前面使用了模板句式，后面自由發揮中就出現了比較多的語言錯誤。

　　建議在今后的學習中，從英語基礎抓起，同時注意積累地道的語言表達以及觀點論述方法。