同等學力英語作文批改：第11期

　　同等學力英語作文原文：

　　There is no denying the fact that medical problem is a grave problem with which we are confronted. Take a look around, we can find the notable instance which is the high cost of health care and the difficulty in getting medical service. In fact, majority of patients feel that they are dissatisfied to the medical service in China.

　　A number of factors account for the problem, but the leading reason might be poor supervison and medical care input deficiency in china. the shortage of medical resources. On the one hand, the artificially high drug prices result in the high cost of health care .Improve the doctor's moral qualities .on the another hand ,the difficulty in getting medical service resut from　the shortage of medical resources.

　　In view of the seriousness of these problems, effective measures must be taken. First, it is essential that we should strengthen government supervison and improve the doctor's moral qualitie. Secondly, it is suggested that the governmemt should increase its investment to alleviate the  the shortage of medical resources  .With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that the problem will be solved in the near future.

　　老師評語：得分9-10分

　　該文章的結構比較清晰，在論述主題時，思路比較清晰。可以比較正確的使用連接詞、各種長短句的變化。

　　缺點是：

　　1. 有個別詞語用的不是很準確。

　　2. 有個別句子結構不完整，會讓老師對其他比較地道的表達產生懷疑，是否為背誦的模板句？

　　3. 單詞拼寫錯誤。

　　不過，總體來說 ，你的作文還是比較不錯的。再接再厲！