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　　My view on keeping pets

　　Different people have different views on keeping pets. Some people think that the keeping pets  can bring happiness for us, while others argue that keeping pets would cause some problems, for exemple ,causing disease, destructing health  and threating to human security and so on.

　　As far as I am concerned, I agree with the first opinion.For one thing, it's good for culturing people's love and sense of responsibility. For another, you have a faithful friend,you can tell it anything even your secret.if you keep a pet Playing with pet could reduce our work stress and bring us some happiness. Finally, you can have a guard that it can sent out a warming to you at once if the stranger come.
 
　　Taking all these factors into consideration, we may safely come to the conclusion that there are many advantages of keeping pets.

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　　同學你好，你的內容比較充實，但是你的結構安排不太合適，在段就應該把自己的觀點闡釋清楚，否則你的 段就是多余的，相當于沒有按照題目要求寫作。注意一些小的語法錯誤哦。繼續努力，加油！