同等學力英語作文批改：第43期

　　同等學力英語作文原文

　　Do “Lucky Numbers” Really Bring Good Luck?

　　When it comes to “lucky numbers bring good luck”, people’s opinions vary from person to person, from place to place and from time to time. Some people argue that lucky numbers bring a positive influence on luck while other people maintain that lucky numbers can not bring good luck. In my view, I think numbers have no relation with luck.

　　A considerable number of examples can be found to prove that numbers have no relation with luck. To take Yang who is enough lucky to gain the five million RMB several days ago in china as a typical example, he used to buy a lottery ticket which number is 8888 or 6666, and the result was that he didn’t have any prize. However, he chose the number 4444 last time and gained the first prize. It is apparent that numbers have no relation with luck. Therefore, we should not depend on lucky numbers.

　　From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that numbers have no relation with luck. In addition, it is also desirable that we should take some effective measures to attain good luck. Only in this we can we lucky.

　　名師點評：8—9分

　　文章結構比較合理，但是內容欠充實，尤其是第二段論證自己的觀點時例子很膚淺，不足以說明自己的觀點。

　　題目要求段是表述有些人認為數字和好運有聯系，而你寫的是不同的人有不同的觀點，似乎不太符合題意，需要改動。今后復習中要多看看范文。