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　　my  view  on  reform  of  medical  care  in  china
     
　　With the development of china ecnormic reform, medical reform has been  excuted  in  many  cities  for  some  years. It brings many advantages  to  citizens.  But  in  fact  there are  some  issues  to  be resolved.  For  instance, the  issue  is  more and  more popular that  the  cost  of  medical  care  is too  expensive and it is too difficult to consult for disease.
     
　　what does cause the phenomenon ?  I think there are some reasons In the begin  with,   china  has  the  largest  number of population in the world . farmer is the majority of it.  Most farmers are still poverty.  The cost of  medical  is very high to them. What'more, the patients want to consult to the famous doctor. However,  there only a few famous  doctores   in  one hospital.  So a lot of patients have to wait.

　　Last  but  not  the  least   ,the  medical  institution  has  places  to  be  improved.
       
　　In my opinion,  to solove this problem need  long  times.   With  the  medical   insurance play  in  urbans  and  rurals,  I believe most of  farms   would can be afford  to the   medical  fee.   On the other hand,  the  leader   of  hospital  should avoid more advances for the doctor to achieve higher  degree or improve  their professical level .  I believe our society will more hormary   in future.

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