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　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China

　　There is no denying the fact that reform of medical care is a hotly debated topic in China today. It has become a gravy problem with which our country is confronted. High medical cost and difficult to see a doctor is a common phenomenon. Taking a lookaround,we can find examples too much to list. In many places we can see or listen these news about no enough to get tretment reported.

　　A number of factors can cause this problem, but the following are the most criticalones. First, due to economic factor, some people did not cure light diease,so delayed to a serious illness. Secondly, some hospitals improved price of medicines and treatment in order to surveve. Finally, others see a doctor to major hospital regardless degree of seriousness ,resulting in a waste of medical resources.

　　In view of seriousness of the problem, I believe that reform of medical must be taken before things get worse. On the one hand, it is essential that laws and regulations be formulated and enforced to limit price of medicines and treatment. On the another hand , integration of health care resources to berrer services for the human. With these measures taken ,it is reasonable for us to expect a brighter future.

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