同等學力英語作文批改：第93期

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　　There is a growing tendency these days for many people who live in countryside to come into and work in city . This problem has caused wide public concern in most cities all over the world. An investigation shows that many emigrants think that working at city provides them with not only a higher salary but also the opportunity of learning new skills.
  
　　Although mang emigrants contribute to the economic growth of the city,they may inevitably bring about many negative impacts.The experts point out that in increasing many people come into and work in city are putting pressure on population control and social order and that they have worsened traffic and public health problems.
  
　　As far as my concern,government should be make efforts to reduce the increasing gap between cities and countryside.They ought to set aside an appropriate fund for improvement of the standard of peasants's lives.They should invite some experts in agriculture to share their experiences information and knowledge with peasants which will coutribute to the economic growth of countryside.

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