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　　My view on reform of medical care in China

　　There is no denying the fact that reform of medical care is a grave problem with which Chinese are confronted. On one hand, most of Chinese think that medicine is too expensive to pay for it. On the other hand, It is a complex procedure for Chinese to go to a hospital to see a doctor.

　　A number of factors could account for these phenomena, but the following are the most critical ones. First, there is such disparity in the standard of living between rich and poor, and most of Chinese farmers are still living in a lower standard .Secondly , with rapid development of economy, greater importance has been attached by people to the quality of life, which cause an increasing number of people to go to hospital only for a routine inspection .More people go to the hospital, more problems will arise . Last but not the least, Chinese medicine insurance and community service are still in the beginning stage, many systems are required to be improved.

　　In my opinion, effective measures should be taken before the things get more difficult. Laws and regulations should be made out by the government to improve and consummate the medicine systems .Medicine market should be managed and supervised strictly. It is reasonable for us to believe that the problems can be solved in the near future with effective measures taken by both the government and the public.

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