同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文批改：第6期

來源：育路教育網(wǎng) 時(shí)間：2011-07-01 10:39:28

　　同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文原文：

　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China

　　With the rapid growth of our economy, the quality of our lives is improving for the better. Recently the issue of the high medical fee and the difficultly to see doctors has been brought to public attention.

　　There are three reasons for this problem. One of the main reasons is that the medicine circulation is directly responsible for the general high price of medicine, which makes some patients even unable to afford to see doctors. Another primary reason is that an increasing number of patients go into the big hospital to see doctors. As a result, some seriously ill people could not be taken good medical help. The last reason is the government is short of support.

　　My suggestions to deal with the problem are follows. To begin with, it is urgent to create public hospital. Second, patients should change their habits of seeing doctor.

　　老師評(píng)語(yǔ)：得分10-12分

　　該文較好的完成了寫作要求，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤比較少，句式的變換也較靈活。只是在今后的寫作練習(xí)中，需要對(duì)一些細(xì)小的語(yǔ)法現(xiàn)象加以注意，比如名詞單復(fù)數(shù)等。