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　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China

　　For the time being,there has been a great increase in the cost of medical care in China and it is too difficulty to get medical service.When it comes to this issue,people always complain o lot.Taking a look around,we can find examples too numerous to list.Many times,we can’t find the appropriate hospital, the professional doctor and the process to see the doctor is complicated.
     
　　A number of factors could account for the problem,but the following are the most critical ones.For one thing,the medical care resource is still in a shortage.The majority of it is in the large hospital of the city.Those who live in the country can’t be treated so well when they get ill.For another ,it is lack of financial support and the necessary supervision.
    
　　As far as I am concerned,I think basic health care should be offered to everyone.Every person has the right to enjoy the medical service.The government should increase the investment for it as well.Finally,the process in the hospital should be simple and easy to understand.With these measure taken,it’s reasonable for us to expect a brighter future.

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