同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文批改：第18期

　　同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文原文：

　　When it comes to keeping pets, opinions differ from person to person. Some people think it is a good thing. Pets such as cats ,dogs and birds .In the first place, to some degree, pets can reduce loneliness for both adults and children, especially for the old. In the second place, keeping pets can make people care for pets increasingly. Without pets, those people’s life would become dull and cheerless.

　　On the other hand, there are many people who say that keeping pets should be banned. They point out that pets are responsible for noise, which affect people’s rest, and for injuries suffered both by the people who keeping them. They also argue that keeping pets are a waste of money and resources.

　　Personally, I believe that we should not go to extremes. On the one hand, we should allow people to keep pets; on the other hand, we should alleviate noise. In addition, keeping pets should be keep cleanlily.

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