同等學力英語作文批改：第34期

　　同等學力英語作文原文：

　　Do “Lucky Numbers” Really Bring Good Luck?

　　“Lucky Numbers” is the word which is often heard from around us. Some people consider that “Lucky Numbers” will bring good lucky. Taking a look around us ,a great deal of examples are occurred. The typical example is the number of car. The people who believe that“Lucky Numbers” will bring good lucky especially like “Lucky Numbers” such as six, eight and act. A mass of money is spent on the “Lucky Numbers” which all the numbers are six or eight.

　　As far as I am concerned, I deed that good luck is not relative with “Lucky Numbers”. In the first place, if only we are strive to do everything . The heaven will help the person who is well done everthing. Successful people is not said that their success result from “Lucky Numbers”. In the second place, “Lucky Numbers” is brought good luck to the people who have “Lucky Numbers”.

　　We should be exactly attituded “Lucky Numbers” and were not abandon to it. After all, “Lucky Numbers” is not really brought good lucy.

　　名師點評：6—8分

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