同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第37期

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　　Do “Lucky Numbers” Really Bring Good Luck?

　　There is no denying the fact that the luck numbers have become a hotly topic in China today. To this phenomenon, with the fast development of economy, an increasing number of people believe that the luck numbers enable to bring their the good luck.. because of the luck numbers such as “6”or “8” can bring them much money or fortune. therefore, they should choose its that in a important days for instance married day or establish house day, involve with numbers of auto as well..

　　As far as I am concerned, however, I hold the negative viewpoint. I make some reasons to support my point. To begin with, I maintain that the luck numbers merely are symbols, digitals. They nothing relative to good luck. What’s more, the good luck to been attain that we should take much time and through continuous hard as well as great deal of sweat. Only we make such a way can bring our much fortune and fine of life.

　　To sum up, I always argue that the good luck is always prepared to have people, cannot same as only easy to choose the luck numbers.

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