同等學力英語作文批改：第47期

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　　People Swarm into Big City

　　With the development of big cities’ economy in china today, there is a increasing number of people swarm into big cities for their dream of future. While some problems coming out with the phenomenon.

　　The several obvious bigger problems are following: For the first place, the increasing number of populations came from some small cities that bring about huge pressure to big cities and add to the burden on the big cities. For the second place, the huge numbers of population result in crowding. The last but not least, it bring about some difficulties of accommodation to big cities for many men and women.

　　In view of this phenomenon, I think that the government should adopt a series of effective measures to settle these problems firstly, in addition , people should transform their conventional concepts，please remember: working at home town we will also have a bright future.

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