同等學力英語作文批改：第55期

　　同等學力英語作文原文

　　There is no denying the fact that an increasing number of people have coming  into big city .Lots of problems have occured ,such as traffic jams ,housing and children’s education at so forth .

　　In the first place, heavy traffic is a significant problem . In many big cities ,due to  public transportation didn’t very convenience and private cars is growing ,people  who drive their private cars is queue on the road when work hours .This is not only wasting  time but also increasing surrounding pollution .In the second place, housing is difficult with housing price constant growing ,many people who get few paid can’t affording higher price which leads to social disorder .

　　Personally ,I believe that effective measures must be taken .first of all ,government should make good policies for countryside development ,such as healthy care ,shopping center and good school .these will appeal to some of people to leave in the local .Meanwhile ,a person should hunt opportunity to small-middle cities or suburb where will have relative to good chance .Only with these measures taken can we except that people will choose living more rational and population stress in the big cities will reduce in the future .

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