同等學力英語作文批改：第115期

　　同等學力英語作文原文

　　As society advances, an increasing proportion of peoples get into big city, which there has been an intense debate over advantages and disadvantages of this appearance. But it is not doubtful that some problems been turned up sooner afterwards.

　　In the first place, a great quantity peoples enter big city what result in increasing suddenly population of the city, where labor force excess of supply over demand, which a large number peoples are out of employment. In the second place, house where people live are more and more in short supply in populous big city. What is more, traffic jam. For this or that reason, social stability are faced with challenge to battle.

　　Personally, I think that both sides have something right .Actually, above phenomena should be viewed as a two-edged sword, which presents us with both benefits and troubles. But we should not give up eating for fear of choking. The best policy, as I see it, is to maximize their advantages and minimize their unhealthy influence, so that they can benefit us in a better way. In conclusion, we should free us from prejudices and extend our vision so as to struggle for achieving the goal of ensuring Chinese people a relatively comfortable life.

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