同等學(xué)力英語作文批改：第118期

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　　The robot is a machine after all

　　Three pictures describe an interesting story for us. The fist one shows that two peoples are playing the card game, one is a people, and another is a robot. The second shows that one people are repairing the robot. The third shows that the game continues when the robot is repaired well.

　　This story told us that intelligent robot will play important role in our life. Future robot will have very high intelligence, but it also need to repair and manage by people. Robot consists of a series of chins which are designed by human. it never exceed human.

　　Robot has many advantages. It is very well assistant in our work, and can work in duty, pollution, dangerous. It is very well partner in our life, and play game, entertainment with us. Future, we can explore more and more robot’s profit for us selves.

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