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　　My View On People Flood Cities
    
　　There is no denying the fact that it has become a prevailing trend for people to flood big cities.This is a genaral social phenomenon.Actually,the phenomenon has been so widespread that it has caused nationwide concern.

　　A number of problems can be taken by the phenomenon,but the leading problems might be an increasing number of city dwellers.With the developpment of modern social economy,there are so growing number of people flooding big cities to hunt for job that the position supply fall short of demand.However ,a host of land has not be planed in the country.In addition,the more sharp competition for works the more pressure can be bringed.If the trend is allowed to continue,the consequence can be disastrous.
     
　　As far as I am concerned,I believe that effective measures must be taken before things get worse.First,it is essential that laws and regulations be worked out and enforced to ban the large number of people flooding cities.Secondly,people should change their attitude towards employment and go to work in the small city,even in the country.With these measures taken,we have reasons to believe that the problem can be solved in the near future.

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