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　　We had got great achievement with reform and development in the past six decades. An increase number of people flood into big cities to make money so there have many problems.

　　In my opinion, there are a number of problems, among them, the following are the most critical .  In the first place, big cities become more and more crowded. Traffic, education and housing become major problems.  Secondly, our government must invest a large number of money to big cities. However, small cities many not get enough investment.  Last but not least, some people want to reap without sowing. They sell defective goods, cheat good and honest people, and steal things that not belong to him so lead to increasing crime rate.

　　To sum up, this is indeed a lot of problems. In my opinion, I believe that we should not go to extremes. On the one hand, we have the beautiful cities because of these hard workers. On the other hand, we must build more cities to adopt to survival. 

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