第三章 高分突破——對比選擇類
題型分析
對比選擇型作文的要求比較明確,也就是直接要求考生對兩種觀點或兩種做法進行比較,進而表明自己對問題或事物的態(tài)度或觀點,做出選擇。即:一些人認為……;另一些人認為……;我認為……。對比選擇型命題作文在四級作文中所占比例很大,因此在今后的練習中值得重視。

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2009年12月 六級真題實例
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short passage entitled Should parents send their kids to art classes? You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
現在有不少家長送孩子參加各種藝術班;
1. 對這種做法有人表示支持;
2. 有人并不贊成;
3. 我認為…
套用模板一
【審 題】分析題目,此作文屬于對比選擇類文章,并且題目中已經給出提綱,考生只需要按照提綱寫出:支持的理由、反對的理由、我的觀點。但最好在前面加上一個引言段。引言可以是簡單的對全文觀點的總結,也可以是相關爭議的背景介紹。支持送孩子學藝術的理由不外乎成就藝術天才和培養(yǎng)興趣愛好;反對的理由不外乎孩子壓力過大和順其自然等。結尾段總結自己的觀點,具備實力的考生還要寫出點新意,運用閃光詞匯。
【思路一】第一段:指出現象,以及相關爭議的背景介紹;
第二段:支持送孩子學藝術的理由;
第三段:反對送孩子學藝術的理由;
第四段:“我”的觀點。
【范文一】
Should Parents Send their Kids to Art Classes?
(1)Children are the future of the nation, (2)the pearl in their parents’ eyes. Hoping that their kids can become the cream of the crop among others, more and more parents send their kids to various art classes to let them learn more. However, people hold different opinions toward this phenomenon.
(3) (4)Some individuals maintain that attending classes is aimed to broaden their kids’ horizon and enrich their knowledge in that the kinds can get acquainted with peers from different family background. (5)In the class, exposed to a big family they will learn how to cooperate with each other and how to develop a harmonious relationship with his her classmates, which is absolutely essential when children grow up.
There are some people who hold different opinions. They argue that because some kids put in a large amount of time in the class, they even can’t set aside time to stay together with their parents and share their feeling, good or bad, with their family members.
(6)As far as I am concerned, just as every coin has two sides, it is true to the phenomenon discussed above. If children can display their potential and they are interested in what they are doing, (7)then parents are expected to provide the children a chance to give a full play of their ability. But if they are disgusted at the class, parents are supposed to support their kids to be engaged in other activities.
【點 評】
范文點評:
(1)開門見山對相關爭議的背景做簡單介紹。
(2)the pearl in their parents’ eyes掌上明珠,語言地道。
(3) Some individuals maintain that…引出支持孩子學藝術的理由。
(4)使用亮點詞匯 broaden their kids’ horizon and enrich their knowledge,develop a harmonious relationship with。
(5) There are some people who hold different opinions.
引出反對孩子學藝術的理由。
(6)使用As far as I am concerned引出自己的觀點。
(7) give a full play of their ability “充分發(fā)揮才能”
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【思路二】
第一段:對送孩子學藝術,人們觀點不一;有人贊成,有人反對,而我認為最適合的才是最好的;
第二段:我支持送孩子學藝術的理由;
第三段:我不贊成的做法及理由;重申個人觀點。
【范文二】
Should Parents Send their Kids to Art Classes?
(1)There is no denying the fact that it has become a prevailing trend for parents to send the children to art training classes of all kinds. Different people hold different views. Some contend that attending art classes can help nurture children’s interest and tap their potentials in such art as music, painting and dancing. However,others think forcing them to go to art classes may only restrict their freedom and affect their healthy growth. (2)Considering one after another, I believe that both sides have something right.
(3)For one thing, it must be admitted that going to art classes is and effective means to find out and give full play to children’s talent in art. For another, by attending art classed, the children can have an all-round development by acquiring knowledge and skills which are not taught in their schools. What’s more, it is conducive to their sound development. kids can also make a lot of friends there, thus their communication skills may also be sharpened.
(5) However, Every coin has two sides. These courses would bring about heavy burdens to students and thus oppose to this practice. In addition, the students might not have adequate time to take rest and reflect on what they have learned in school. Therefore, (6)it is not advisable for parents to deprive their children of the right to choose to learn what they truly like. Remember, the fittest is the best.
【點 評】
范文點評:
(1)使用句型There is no denying the fact tha引出現象,概括不同人的觀點,最后表明自己的立場。
(2) 使用Considering one after another引出自己的觀點。
(3)使用For one thing,…For another,…What’s more,…來擴展文章,從而使觀點層次清晰,論證有力。
(4) give full play to children’s talent,have an all-round development,be conducive to等成為文章亮點詞匯。
(5) 使用However使觀點發(fā)生轉折,引出自己不贊成的做法和理由。bring about heavy burdens to “是…的負擔”
(6) 使用it is not advisable for…to do …自己的建議。
(7)the fittest is the best. “最適合的就是最好的”,此句簡短有力,使自己的觀點更加鮮明。
2008年6月 六級真題實例
套用模板一
【審 題】本題要求寫一篇議論文,屬觀點對立型和問題解決型作文的糅合與拼接。考題屬于常規(guī)性題目,但又與時俱進,側重于對校園內學生除學習外的娛樂方式的關注。選材體現了當今社會教育取向的變化,由關注學生學習成績向全面發(fā)展素質教育轉變。
【思路一】第一段:引入現象:現在娛樂活動多種多樣并列舉其益處及原因;
第二段:列舉娛樂活動的弊處及原因;
第三段:表明自己的觀點態(tài)度:寓樂于學。
【范文一】
Recreational Activities
(1) When it comes to recreational activities, different people hold different views. (2) Some people think those recreational activities are great and necessary, because they can help people relax from the hard work and study. (3) Some of the activities, such as hiking, jogging, can help people relax physically; (3) while some of them, such as surfing the Internet, can help people relax mentally.
(4) However, other people hold that so many kinds of recreational activities may have a bad effect on our lives. Some people may not resist some temptations from those activities, and indulge themselves in those activities. At last they are (5) lured away from their study or their work.
(6) In my opinion, we should pay more attention to the advantages of various recreational activities and make the most of them. Meanwhile, we should learn how to use those activities positively and make them a helpful tool for our development.
【點 評】
(1) 開門見山,引出主題
(2) 引出支持者的觀點及原因
(3) 列舉有益處的娛樂活動
(4) 話鋒一轉,引出反對者的觀點及原因
(5) 精彩短語:受誘惑而荒廢學業(yè)或工作
(6) 闡述我的觀點:寓樂于學
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【思路二】第一段引入現象:現在娛樂活動多種多樣;
第二段列舉娛樂活動的弊益及原因;
第三段表明自己的觀點態(tài)度:不能因噎廢食,建議娛樂要有度。
【范文二】
Recreational Activities
In people’s daily life, (1) there are various recreational activities (2) apart from studying or working (3) ranging from Karaoke or dancing to computer games or sports games. Such activities are beneficial as well as harmful to us if undertaken inappropriately. (4)As far as I’m concerned, we should pay more attention to the advantages of various recreational activities
(5) For one thing, those recreational activities are great and necessary, because they can help people relax from the hard work and study. Some of the activities, such as hiking, jogging, can help people relax physically; while some of them, such as surfing the Internet, can help people relax mentally. For another, it can improve our communication skills because most of these activities are done with others.
(6) However, if we spend too much time on singing, dancing or other games, we might fail to concentrate on our duties such as studying our working, which in turn may lead to further consequences. Therefore, recreational activities should be done within a certain limit so that we can keep a proper balance between recreation and studying or working life.
【點 評】
(1) 引出現象,直擊主題
(2) apart from “除了”
(3) 使用ranging from列舉娛樂活動,呼應主題(多種多樣)。現在分詞作定語
(4) 使用As far as I’m concerned引出自己的觀點
(5)例舉娛樂活動的益處
(6) 使用轉折詞however話鋒一轉,談及例舉娛樂活動的益處
(7)亮點詞匯 concentrate on,in turn,lead to further consequences,keep a proper balance,為文章添彩。 |